Caligula's Launderette

Thank you all for you wunderbar comments. _____ VI. Star Light, Star Bright… Millie left the bucket, so it sat half under the porch of the farmhouse. Slowly, she climbed ...

Thank you all for the loverly critiques et al. I promised more, now here's the delivery. III. Things That Died in the War Millie always woke before the sun—one day, ...

So, I'm back here with some notes I thought would help with your rewrite. SHOW VS. TELL Right now, the chapter is full of the narrator just telling us what ...

Thank so both so much, you guys rule. Sam, I really appreciate you pointing out things about the other girl, now I've got all new brainwaves on that. Gyr, I ...

Thank you, SimonCowellLuver, for your review. I have changed some things around, a bit. I am playing around with leaving in or leaving out "something / like Tetris;". Ta, Cal. ...

I welcome your reply, but you really need to check the post date before you review. Not that I don't appreciate your reading and response of my poetry, I do. ...

I have people. :D It is amazing, D I mean, isn't it? ;)

Hey, hon. Needless to say, you've got me hooked on Mutts. Ta, Cal.

Hey, hon. I'm back, again, with another crit. Ta, Cal.

Hey, hon. You know the drill by now, tell me if anything needs to be explained. Ta, Cal.

Hello, hon. You know the drill. Ta, Cal.

lyrical_sunshine, :D You can enter the Stolen Dialogue: Cal's Quote Contest . Or, any of the contests I host in the future. Ta, Cal.

Here is that proper critique I was talking about. If you have any questions or my handwriting is illegible please tell me. Ta, Cal.

Was the above helpful? IMPRESSIONS I really liked the humor you used with Creiha falling. I think you may wan't to emphasize the humor of the situation even more. Though, ...

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